[原创]二十四番花信首
<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">黄昏疏影罗浮梦</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体">,<p></p></font></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">明月孤山和靖心</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体">.<p></p></font></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black;"><p><font face="宋体"> </font></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">一枝雪蕊破春立</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black;"><p></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">几缕幽香噙雪生</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black;"><p></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black;"><p><font face="宋体"> </font></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;">闻琴破腊<span lang="EN-US">,</span>东阁西湖韵胜<span lang="EN-US">,<p></p></span></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;">咏志抒情<span lang="EN-US">,</span>园巷孤山格高<span lang="EN-US">.<p></p></span></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;"><p> </p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">香透九重天，又见客来熙客往<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial;">花开两样雪，依然新白抱新红。<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt;"><p><font face="宋体"> </font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">独放岁寒姿，</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;">霜禽粉蝶闲中领<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">敢争魁首誉，墨客骚人破处行</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;"><p></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;"><p> </p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">三弄笛声<span lang="EN-US">,</span>花心惊破<span lang="EN-US">,</span></span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;">香闻流水处<span lang="EN-US">;<p></p></span></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;">千觞月色<span lang="EN-US">,</span>画韵别添<span lang="EN-US">,</span>影落野人家<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;"><p> </p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;">一枝欲报春消息，唤学子，</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">分阴当惜莫闲过<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">万朵何愁雪埋藏，愿吾侪，百事宜勤早出头<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></b></p><p><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black;"><p><font face="宋体" size="3"> </font></p></span></b></p><p><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial;"><p><font face="宋体" size="3"> </font></p></span></b></p><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">同子真一性<span lang="EN-US">,</span>共和靖三生<span lang="EN-US">,</span>高韵何劳凡眼识<span lang="EN-US">?<p></p></span></font></font></span></b></p><p><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><b><span style="COLOR: black;">呼野鹤比邻<span lang="EN-US">,</span>抱</span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial;">闲云</span><span style="COLOR: black;">归隐<span lang="EN-US">,</span>馨香唯有自心知<span lang="EN-US">!<p></p></span></span></b></font></font></p><p><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black;"><p><font face="宋体" size="3"> </font></p></span></b></p><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">萧纲赋里<span lang="EN-US">,</span>苏轼词中<span lang="EN-US">,</span>樽坐倒<span lang="EN-US">,</span>笛卧吹<span lang="EN-US">,</span>抒不尽玉雪襟怀<span lang="EN-US">,</span>金兰气韵<span lang="EN-US"> ; <p></p></span></font></font></span></b></p><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">大庾岭头<span lang="EN-US">,</span>罗浮山下<span lang="EN-US">,</span>眼放开<span lang="EN-US">,</span>胸涤净<span lang="EN-US">,</span>赢得些伯夷风骨<span lang="EN-US">,</span>姑射交谊<span lang="EN-US">.<p></p></span></font></font></span></b></p><p><b><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: black;"><p><font face="宋体" size="3"> </font></p></span></b></p><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">世外清名第一<span lang="EN-US">,</span>无花态度<span lang="EN-US">,</span>有雪精神<span lang="EN-US">,</span>傲骨不吟风月色<span lang="EN-US">,<p></p></span></font></font></span></b></p><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">人间好友成三<span lang="EN-US">,</span>胜竹行藏<span lang="EN-US">,</span>饶松襟抱<span lang="EN-US">,</span>高怀共话岁寒心<span lang="EN-US">.<p></p></span></font></font></span></b></p> 深刻领会错大精神,正在反思中,另给错大一箱二锅头~~~ <div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>超级老生</i>在2008-2-22 21:19:53的发言：</b><br/><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#267612" size="5">偶个人的看法是立意大多不鲜明，仿佛想出半联后凑另外一半。</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#267612" size="5">长句因而内容显得完整些，但拖沓了少许，缺乏亮点。</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#267612" size="5">只是个人看法，酒也多，不足为凭，不妥处请谅解</font></strong></p></div><p></p>我看十七大文件也没有看这几句话费的时间长,有长进,慰劳一下自己 说实话：可能阿拉理解力不好，看8大懂。梅花？ 沙发坐坐 <p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#267612" size="5">偶个人的看法是立意大多不鲜明，仿佛想出半联后凑另外一半。</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#267612" size="5">长句因而内容显得完整些，但拖沓了少许，缺乏亮点。</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#267612" size="5">只是个人看法，酒也多，不足为凭，不妥处请谅解</font></strong></p> <p>不错。漂亮。但梅花的神韵没有见到。。。</p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><strong>几缕幽香噙雪生<br/>---这联字少，却是我最喜欢的一联。噙字，我喜欢。神韵也只在这里看到。。。</strong></span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><strong>香透九重天，又见客来熙客往<br/>---这个香浓烈得俗了。。。不是说不给人欣赏啊，可能是手法上的问题。</strong></span></span></p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><p style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">三弄笛声<span lang="EN-US">,</span>花心惊破<span lang="EN-US">,</span></span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;">香闻流水处<span lang="EN-US">;<br/>---这个香得不知所云。。。唯字面漂亮。。。</span></span></b></p><p style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;"><span lang="EN-US"></span></span></b></p><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><b><span style="COLOR: black;">呼野鹤比邻<span lang="EN-US">,</span>抱</span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-family: arial;">闲云</span><span style="COLOR: black;">归隐<span lang="EN-US">,</span>馨香唯有自心知<span lang="EN-US">!<br/>---这个香得凄厉。。。 世无高士，不求凡眼？只是一呼一抱，野鹤闲云既为有情物，又怎止自心知?<p></p></span></span></b></font></font></p><p></p></span></span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;"><span lang="EN-US"><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">人间好友成三<span lang="EN-US">,</span>胜竹行藏<span lang="EN-US">,</span>饶松襟抱<span lang="EN-US">,</span>高怀共话岁寒心<span lang="EN-US">. <br/>---既是好友，为何定要攀比胜饶？</span></font></font></span></b></p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><span lang="EN-US"></span></font></font></span></b><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">萧纲赋里<span lang="EN-US">,</span>苏轼词中<span lang="EN-US">,</span>樽坐倒<span lang="EN-US">,</span>笛卧吹<span lang="EN-US">,</span>抒不尽玉雪襟怀<span lang="EN-US">,</span>金兰气韵<span lang="EN-US"> ; <p></p></span></font></font></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">大庾岭头<span lang="EN-US">,</span>罗浮山下<span lang="EN-US">,</span>眼放开<span lang="EN-US">,</span>胸涤净<span lang="EN-US">,</span>赢得些伯夷风骨<span lang="EN-US">,</span>姑射交谊<span lang="EN-US">. </span></font></font></span></b></p><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><span lang="EN-US">---眼放开，胸涤净，这便觉得虚了。。。金兰气韵，我不知道是否合适啦。伯夷姑射，隐士仙子，倒是符合。那两兄弟更像义士的说- -b</span></font></font></span></b></p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><span lang="EN-US"><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#267612" size="5">最后套3楼的话，只是个人看法，见识也不多，不足为凭，不妥处请谅解。</font></strong></p></span></font></font></span></b></span></span></b></span></span> <div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>飞雨闲云</i>在2008-2-25 22:53:43的发言：</b><br/><p>不错。漂亮。但梅花的神韵没有见到。。。</p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><strong>几缕幽香噙雪生<br/>---这联字少，却是我最喜欢的一联。噙字，我喜欢。神韵也只在这里看到。。。</strong></span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><strong>香透九重天，又见客来熙客往<br/>---这个香浓烈得俗了。。。不是说不给人欣赏啊，可能是手法上的问题。</strong></span></span></p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><p style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">三弄笛声<span lang="EN-US">,</span>花心惊破<span lang="EN-US">,</span></span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;">香闻流水处<span lang="EN-US">;<br/>---这个香得不知所云。。。唯字面漂亮。。。</span></span></b></p><p style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;"><span lang="EN-US"></span></span></b></p><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><b><span style="COLOR: black;">呼野鹤比邻<span lang="EN-US">,</span>抱</span></b><b><span style="COLOR: black; mso-bidi-font-family: arial;">闲云</span><span style="COLOR: black;">归隐<span lang="EN-US">,</span>馨香唯有自心知<span lang="EN-US">!<br/>---这个香得凄厉。。。 世无高士，不求凡眼？只是一呼一抱，野鹤闲云既为有情物，又怎止自心知?<p></p></span></span></b></font></font></p><p></p><p></p><p></p></span></span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;"><span lang="EN-US"><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">人间好友成三<span lang="EN-US">,</span>胜竹行藏<span lang="EN-US">,</span>饶松襟抱<span lang="EN-US">,</span>高怀共话岁寒心<span lang="EN-US">. <br/>---既是好友，为何定要攀比胜饶？</span></font></font></span></b></p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><span lang="EN-US"></span></font></font></span></b><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">萧纲赋里<span lang="EN-US">,</span>苏轼词中<span lang="EN-US">,</span>樽坐倒<span lang="EN-US">,</span>笛卧吹<span lang="EN-US">,</span>抒不尽玉雪襟怀<span lang="EN-US">,</span>金兰气韵<span lang="EN-US"> ; <p></p></span></font></font></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3">大庾岭头<span lang="EN-US">,</span>罗浮山下<span lang="EN-US">,</span>眼放开<span lang="EN-US">,</span>胸涤净<span lang="EN-US">,</span>赢得些伯夷风骨<span lang="EN-US">,</span>姑射交谊<span lang="EN-US">. </span></font></font></span></b></p><p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><span lang="EN-US">---眼放开，胸涤净，这便觉得虚了。。。金兰气韵，我不知道是否合适啦。伯夷姑射，隐士仙子，倒是符合。那两兄弟更像义士的说- -b</span></font></font></span></b></p><b><span style="COLOR: black;"><font face="宋体"><font size="3"><span lang="EN-US"><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#267612" size="5">最后套3楼的话，只是个人看法，见识也不多，不足为凭，不妥处请谅解。</font></strong></p></span></font></font></span></b></span></span></b></span></span></div><p></p>认真看了十遍,学习领会消化 <p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">辛苦小羊羔</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">偶也补充下一些具体看法</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">世外清名第一，无花态度，有雪精神.</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">内容其实就已经足够</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">人间好友成三，效竹行藏，鉴松怀抱；</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">世外清名第一，无声态度，有桀精神.</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">既然是友，当然不能贬低而是汲取。</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">有雪精神其实很漂亮，但很难找题材对仗呼应，不如小自对转折下变通，然也？</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5"></font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5"></font></strong></p><p></p> <p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">还忽视了朗读效果，友/有</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">既然小自对，不如</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">人间好友成三，效竹行藏，鉴松怀抱；</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">世外清名第一，寻常态度，桀骜精神.</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">恩？</font></strong></p><p></p> <p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">桀骜精神不好......</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">孤傲？.......</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">大体表达一清高，什么词语更合适呢？</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">酒......（闪........）</font></strong></p> <div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>超级老生</i>在2008-2-29 1:37:12的发言：</b><br/><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">辛苦小羊羔</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">偶也补充下一些具体看法</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">世外清名第一，无花态度，有雪精神.</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">内容其实就已经足够</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">人间好友成三，效竹行藏，鉴松怀抱；</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">世外清名第一，无声态度，有桀精神.</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">既然是友，当然不能贬低而是汲取。</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">有雪精神其实很漂亮，但很难找题材对仗呼应，不如小自对转折下变通，然也</font></strong></p></div>羊羊说既是好友，为何定要攀比胜饶？当时我觉得说的很有道理,但是没细想修改的问题,经错错这么指点一下,顿时感觉写的时候太大意了,错大改的很好,上二锅头 <div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>超级老生</i>在2008-2-29 1:39:43的发言：</b><br/><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">还忽视了朗读效果，友/有</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">既然小自对，不如</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">人间好友成三，效竹行藏，鉴松怀抱；</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">世外清名第一，寻常态度，桀骜精神.</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">恩？</font></strong></p><p></p></div><p></p>赞成错大意见.<strong><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#177217" size="5">桀骜我会另想.</font></strong>
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