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发表于 2007-6-10 16:10:29 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
<pre><pre><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">凤顶</span><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">:</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; COLOR: #ff6600; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">剑</span><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">拔弩张原执我</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; COLOR: #ff6600; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">花</span><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">飞叶落未由人</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">燕颌</span><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">:</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; 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FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-font-family: 新細明體;"><p>&nbsp;</p></span></p><p>&nbsp;</p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn;">决意把关存<span style="COLOR: #ff6600;">剑</span>道</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-font-family: 新細明體;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn;">谈情记紧别<span style="COLOR: #ff6600;">花</span>心</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-font-family: 新細明體;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-font-family: 新細明體;"><p>&nbsp;</p></span></p><p>&nbsp;</p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">雁足</span><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">:</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn;">警世全凭三尺<span style="COLOR: #ff6600;">剑</span></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-font-family: 新細明體;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn;">怡情有赖四时<span style="COLOR: #ff6600;">花</span></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; COLOR: #ff6600; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-font-family: 新細明體;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-font-family: 新細明體;"><p>&nbsp;</p></span></p><p>&nbsp;</p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn;">笼纱格:</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-fareast-font-family: 新細明體;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">当酬故友延陵挂</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-fareast-font-family: simsun;"><font face="Times New Roman"> (</font></span><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; COLOR: #ff6600; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">剑</span><font face="Times New Roman"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-fareast-font-family: simsun;">)</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></font></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">莫笑痴人黛玉埋</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-fareast-font-family: simsun;"><font face="Times New Roman"> (</font></span><span lang="ZH-CN" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; COLOR: #ff6600; FONT-FAMILY: simsun; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:'mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;">花</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-fareast-font-family: simsun;"><font face="Times New Roman">)</font></span></p></pre></pre>
2#
发表于 2007-6-13 04:22:18 | 只看该作者
<p>学习了~~</p><p>赶明儿也试试~~~</p>
3#
发表于 2007-6-15 04:27:34 | 只看该作者
<p>港台的文学论坛特别爱好诗钟</p><p></p>
4#
发表于 2007-7-14 05:24:04 | 只看该作者
<p>偶个人的观点,位置运用没问题,功底也出示,但意境和文字的美感,损伤很大.</p>
5#
发表于 2007-7-14 05:27:53 | 只看该作者
<p>试验一下,就试验下第一唱</p><p>剑藏高阁锋犹冷</p><p>花落谁家春不孤</p>
6#
发表于 2007-7-14 05:30:50 | 只看该作者
随手一下,其实诗钟是锻炼整体思想的呼应,能化典尤其见风范,可惜错某没那水准,多瞻仰前人风范...

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